Great plot and art work, and use of music to set the tone.... I'm a fast reader so I was able to keep up but I would either reduce the amount of words per frame or extend the time for reading... as others may not be that quick.
Reviews for "The Monster"
exninja123 responds:
Thank you! :)
The only grammar thing I caught was, "I quetly sneaked away" should be "I quietly snuck away". The art is a great improvement, but I'd like some screens to be part text and part drawing (in a dynamic way). The music was really well chosen but the transitions were often too blatant, I prefer fading on everything when it's not a surprise moment. When it is a surprise moment there should be some other noise to end the music like a thunder clap or something. Try adding ambient noises in the future, like crowds rioting, a grandma laugh, a sound of the girl's power being released. Thanks for sharing and good job!
exninja123 responds:
Thank you!
And for the thoughtful review! :D
I liked it. Music worked really well. The art was great. I was just looking for some animation, I guess it's just your style.
exninja123 responds:
Thanks! :)
Maybe it's just me, but I had some trouble with this animation. It seems as if you wanted to provoke a sense of mystery, but it didn't seem to work out so well. Her power was never really explained, even explaining it metaphorically would have been nice. There was no real antagonist, and there were no names to work off of. I just felt lost, especially when there were music pauses to transition to the next song. It really killed the flow. The ending was a total head scratcher. Period. I did enjoy the music choice though, and the storyline was actually ok, although a bit choppy. I know this is a character story, but it lacked character development. Even though I may sound a bit mean, don't take offense. You did a great job, and should be proud of your work, I will definitely check out more of your work. A solid 3.5. ^^
exninja123 responds:
i definitely understand what you meant.
i actually wanted to flesh out everything in the actual story of "The Other Side" (if i ever get to)
thanks for the thoughtful review! :)
honestly, its nothing to new, it doesnt even explain the story of it much. 2.5 for the good ideas put into it, hell, ill give you 3 because you at least put color into it
exninja123 responds:
haha, thanks! xD