logic, plz
Why does he run to the top of the counter, and then, while obviously in plain view, act as if he has found a safe zone? He even ran right past the man's line-of-sight before climbing up there. This was dumb. This was very dumb... It was fucking retarded.
Methinks ur a flash troll.
Oh dear :P
That breath sound in the beginning...
I heard that sound in my garden today! XD I went searching with two knifes in my hands for a scary junk hiding in the darkness of the night... xD
never found that bastard :|
PS.
love your sense of humor... only the end was little bit too... cliché..?
Its arms give her away...
Apple is a actually a troll!!!
I literally sat for 30 seconds at the end staring.
I thought was it really over? IT was a good idea but would have been alot better if it was longer than 30 seconds.
5/10 3/5
Simple
I think it was done quite well. Would've prefered when the character came in to see him lick his lips instead of sticking his tongue out, but that's just me. The story was original. Keep working with it and preferably increase the running time of submissions to come, doesn't have to be by much, but gradually increase per submission. The community will thank you for it.