Awesome flash!
the guy below me is stupid though (Ignyte) Its not trying to be the best flash in history
Reviews for "desert."
TimeWasted responds:
Thank you, kindly! I will now give you a metaphorical high-five
ehh..
overall: 3/5 : 6/10
Audio: 7/10
Animation: 6/10
Plot: 6/10
I'm not really sure where to start with this, so i think ill just go from the most noticeably annoying part.
"water...... water...... waaaater" yes, we get it, a stranded man in the desert would obviously be looking for water and or shelter. making him say it over and over again is silly, seeing as people dont exactly talk when stranded and are looking for water as opening your mouth will dry it out.
some of the sounds you used were decent and wernt noticeably compressed, however it was the way you used that which ruined them. most sounds have a small amount of background noise or white noise, this is heard a second or even half a second before and after the sound has played. This was the case in this animation, I've heard of some people adding in a quite white noise just to cancel out the noise that comes with the sound.
The animation was full but wasnt well rounded, meaning, you gave a good sense of space, showing a single lonely figure in a vast open space.
Some of the characters movements were far to juttery or sudden for my liking (like when he fell to the ground when he got to the tap)
And the biggest thing I noticed was that nothing had any shade to them. only the character cast a shadow on the ground, but nothing else had any shadow or had any form of shading too giving a lack of depth to the entire flash...
Plot wise, It's very interesting. finding a pretzel tap in the desert would be rather annoying and all that, but the story feels... lost.
You have given us a guy thats in the desert with no explanation as to why or how he got there. I'm aware that alot of animation's just do these sorts of thing for fun and that it is what it is. but I cant help myself but still ask.
As far as the story for the flash goes.
there isnt one, theres a guy in the desert who finds something that it isnt. the end.
Keep up the good work, try to work on an attention to detail, smoothing out your animation a bit more and remembering your shades and shadows.
All in all, this really shouldnt have been on the front page.
but thats what happens these days...
TimeWasted responds:
I appreciate your thoughts and criticism. I am inclined to believe you missed the point, however. It was supposed to be sort of like an animated one to three panel comic joke. A short, absurd joke. It wasn't supposed to be a three act story or plot, just an animated joke. It was originally slated as a collection of six shorts, but I am instead going to release them all separately, I think. I don't always put shading in characters, sometimes I do, sometimes I don't, but that's just my stylization. Shading is not a necessity, especially in cartoons. Look at many of the major cartoons on television today and you will notice the characters are simply not shaded, but colored in cells. That's what I was going for with this. About your comment about not liking the repetition of saying water-- have you considered the effects of dehydration, complete isolation, etc. on someone's brain? Oftentimes people in such situations talk aloud to themselves to keep sanity, or as a result of insanity. This talking was also used for expository purposes. As for sound, I used a built in mic on my laptop, 'cause I have no actual sound equipment, so it was all sort of DIY. There is also quiet white noise, called desert ambiance if you listen closely. The character model used [as well as some of the animation] was from over a year ago, before I had read as much as I have now on animation theory, so I couldn't do as much with it as I could if I was to start anew, but I didn't feel like starting all over. So, I agree the animation isn't top notch. I liked the suddenness of the fall, though, personally. Again, thanks for the criticism and hope my comment clears the air on it a bit.
That sucks..
He died shortly after from preztle asphyxiation.
Aw man,
That right there is a valid case of non-labeled pretzel tap, and in the desert noless.
For shame on that tap's owner.
Nice flash man.
TimeWasted responds:
Glad you liked it! It was put there by an eccentric rancher years ago, before the land was entirely a desert. His land was later abandoned due to an increase in the harshness of the climate. He left his pretzel pump behind and functional because he had a cruel sense of humor. That's how I see it, anyway, you can envision your own background info if you like.
Very funny =)
That was a great pick-me-up. Thank you so much for sharing your talents with the rest of us. Very nice work.
TimeWasted responds:
Wow, thanks! You are clearly a very smart, sexy, and likable individual!