Not Bad
Animation was really good, voice acting was good but the premice and the script was a little cliched. I did like the line about lying here in a pool of my own irony but it was a all a bit obvious. Can't diss the final message though.
Reviews for "Meet Larry"
black and white PWNZ d00d!!!
honestly i didn't like it. It was really cheezy and his super manly tough guy voice doesn't fit the slightly overweight coldisack guy. well put together though.
It's good, but not without its flaws.
First off, great writing. Nice story, and you directed it in a way that I could sense what you were going for.
Problem is, a dramatic animation like this requires better animations/styling. Consider it nothing more than critique, but I couldn't take anything seriously because the style didn't feel polished or mature.
Also, some of the dialogue made me laugh when it tried to be serious. The opening lines, for instance. First thing I thought was that it's gonna be a comedy.
Mediocre
At first I thought this was a comedy due to the Intro and the "press play for fuck sake, there's not much time!" clip. If this isn't humorous, noting is.
So when I find that this story isn't a comedy, I'm conflicted. Not a good place to leave your audience (unless you've got a meaning behind it). As we continue, the graphics are alright, simple drawings, except for the bridge (not the car going across, but everything else) then the fog or clouds, great tones, texture, there's texture! But I don't see enough of this, especially on the characters.
The dream sequence is awkward because of this different style in the drawing.
I would have liked more sound affects such as an engine revving when we see the tachometer Jump in RsPM.
The character's looks did not fit the voice one bit. A rough, scratchy voice is a middle aged balding white guy? I've never seen that before. I found it hard to believe.
Which leads to the lines/story line. Cute, but elementary. Scripts that have to explain the storyline can be hard to pull off since they'll sound very cheesy. I would have liked something a little less in my face, such as, fewer lines, which might have helped create more impact. Also a little more work on the lines would have helped. However, the voice acting was great. Very believable and helped me follow through.
I'm curious to see your other stuff since there is something there. Keep working at it.
Cheers.
When pictures paint a thousand words
Unfortunately the story the guy narrated to match the annimation was not good enough to stick, if Id explain my rating 5 is for the animation and 1 for a message I heard to many times before. Im sorry but the messge you are trying to give out from your submission isnt good enough to make this unique