oh my god..
Okay don't mean to hate this too much I mean I liked the idea of some part and the whole 'oh actually I'm dead' was smart but the whole emo thing everyone word you said was soooo cliche. It just looked like you were trying to copy every aspect of that roshak guy from watchmen. Not being offensive here but it sounded like the sort of story I'd hand in back whe I was doing my GCSEs....
soo emo
naa just kidding =p
hehe nice animation,
nice voice.
nice story.
i really like the message told
whats the song on the outro??
i really liked it.
Fantastic
Really gripping. I was feeling things for the poor guy. Well written. Keep it up. :)
Mediocre
At first I thought this was a comedy due to the Intro and the "press play for fuck sake, there's not much time!" clip. If this isn't humorous, noting is.
So when I find that this story isn't a comedy, I'm conflicted. Not a good place to leave your audience (unless you've got a meaning behind it). As we continue, the graphics are alright, simple drawings, except for the bridge (not the car going across, but everything else) then the fog or clouds, great tones, texture, there's texture! But I don't see enough of this, especially on the characters.
The dream sequence is awkward because of this different style in the drawing.
I would have liked more sound affects such as an engine revving when we see the tachometer Jump in RsPM.
The character's looks did not fit the voice one bit. A rough, scratchy voice is a middle aged balding white guy? I've never seen that before. I found it hard to believe.
Which leads to the lines/story line. Cute, but elementary. Scripts that have to explain the storyline can be hard to pull off since they'll sound very cheesy. I would have liked something a little less in my face, such as, fewer lines, which might have helped create more impact. Also a little more work on the lines would have helped. However, the voice acting was great. Very believable and helped me follow through.
I'm curious to see your other stuff since there is something there. Keep working at it.
Cheers.
Well written
It was a great story, and the way you set it up was very memorable. Your ability to tell a good story overshadows the animation itself, which was not all that impressive but suited the tone of the movie.
I think in terms of content, when compared to many of the videos out there this is most definitely a 10.
Keep up the good work.