waaay of base
dude, there are so many things wrong factually, story wise, even the scaling. i can't begin to tell you how far you let this drift from the actual story or premise; you turned it into a cheap anime. i suggest you work on your writing skills a bit, because alot of people missed the whole point. also it is easy to forget things like scaling of objects and people, especially when doing fan stuff. but i give you props, in a free comic i had gotten the plasma pistol was the size of your average spare tire.