Good stufff
But your grammar is atrocious. Bad things happenS....THIS monsters.....English doesn't seem to be your frist language.
Reviews for "GOLEM"
Impkid responds:
it's not xDDDDD sorry, i'll see what i can do about it, the thruth is im chilean, and i wanted to post my animation in here, but my english is not the best...
please if there are more mistakes make me know. thanks
im learning english this way too xD
Quite entertaining...
I could have sworn that the grammar was off just a bit, but I looked through it again and didn't find a problem. That's not why you fell short of a ten.
I didn't give you a ten because I didn't feel the flash was about a golem. I get what it's about. Still, I felt as this was a small episode in the much larger world Menace City. It was really good. I enjoyed the cartoon, but it needs to be developed. You could make a great series out of this. Contest winning for sure. Keep it up.
Impkid responds:
Thanks for your commentary, i will work in more stories about Menace city.
A possible good start
Alright, congratz, it turns out your first flash animation submission wasn't bad. But it was pretty anticlimactic. Make a series, you seem to have built the lore for one. With a little imagination and a lot of time this can be awesome.
Okay...
Now you have to show what happened. Doesn't need to be in full graphic detail, you just need to show the guy and his look of terror before the Golem rips him apart like he ripped apart her heart!
You can use that line, I give you permission.
NICE
i like how you put the pillows in there