Odd...
That was the odd... very odd... I can't really say anything else...
Reviews for "The Breakfast"
Needs work on the Ukulele
Well, you get a lot of marks for the surrealism of your piece - I had little, if any idea what was actually going on there, to be honest.
Your own drawing style isn't that bad, so I'd suggest that you draw your own dolphin, just to keep it all under the same 'style umbrella'. If you can't draw dolphins, try tracing one, as it would look better than having a poorly cropped piece moving about on screen like you did.
Perhaps it could have used more on the vocal aspect of it, as that would certainly help to convey a plot for the piece overall - given a few more tweaks, you'll get there. Perhaps also you could practice your playing of the ukulele as well, so that it sounds more professional?
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OK, well that was umm... unique
Not too shabby. I usually enjoy randomness here and there, even though this was a little exaggeratingly random.
The animation wasn't that good, since it wasn't smooth and wasn't that eye-catching. You could've animated the dolphin a little more, especially its mouth, and in general some more animation is necessary. After reading the word 'stickmen' in the reviews below, I expected a black and while stickman, but you did manage to colour them in and it didn't look that bad. Still could've been better. The backgrounds are quite simple and the drawings were rough, but it's better than a lot of graphics I've seen (of Flash, I mean).
The concept was extremely random, but it did make me laugh a little. I don't know why it didn't work much for the reviewers under me; I rather enjoyed it. It could have been slightly less random though, like a breakfast exploding in front of your face may've been funny if it had a little story behind it, and a dolphin popping out of nowhere could do with a bit of an introduction (maybe you could move the flash to another scene where it shows a dolphin getting out of the sea, and try to think of a reason why it entered the guy's house).
The audio, as mentioned in practically ever review under me, wasn't too good, since you could barely heard it and I quickly lost track of it. You should make it match more with the flash itself to add to the humour. The dolphin sounds, on the other hand, were quite good.
It's alright as a random flash, but I've seen quite a number of better random flashes around Newgrounds. This is probably the most random I've ever seen, lol :P. Anyway, I let out a chuckle or two here and there, but the animation needs fixing, the graphics, although quite good (I quite liked the way you drew the tongue) was rough in a lot of places, especially at the very beginning, and the audio was too quiet and didn't match that much with the flash. Work on those, and it'd definitely boost your score up by quite a bit.
4/10
2/5
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~ Animation ~
Animation was fine in almost every case. It would have been nice if the dolphin was animated and did a bit more than just hover whenever it moved. Also, moving the mouth of the dolphin might have been a nice addition.
~ Graphics ~
The sticks were pretty cool and their style was nothing to complain about. Again, my only complaint comes from the dolphin. You should have drawn one out yourself and because you used a picture it really took away from everything.
A little bit more detail in the background would have also been much better as it was very empty.
~ Story/Content ~
Yeah, random is funny when you do it in a funny way. This was more like random, meh, I don't want to watch it ever again and it wasn't enjoyable in anyway type of random. Not really much else to say other than that.
~ Audio ~
When you thought the submission couldn't get any worse the audio starts to play. Now again there are random songs that sound good and can add to humor and then there is whatever you used for audio that made me dislike it very much.
~ Overall ~
Really everything needs improved on to make a good submission. Not funny in anyway, bad audio, bad graphics, etc.. Stickmen were alright and probably the only decent thing that you did in the submission.
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Random
There's nothing wrong with a little bit randomness from time to time. Most of the time it's quite funny, but here it didn't work, at least for me.
I just couldn't figure out what was happening and what was this dolphin doing there? And why was he cut out so badly?
Also, the audio is pretty bad. Not only the quality of sound is low, but the quality of music as well. "Dissonant" can hardly describe the tune you played on the ukulele....
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