you serious!!!
if this was your first ever flash movie.....dont and i repeat DONT stop making them, this was a brilliant and gripping animation. I agree with your description that the 20 fps is a little horrid mabye if you could ramp that up and re-do the voice audio mabye it would give it a little extra punch.
Excellent job for your first flash movie. I only hope my first film comes out half as good as this :)