Great!
It was Great!
I like the way how you animated things.
especially the background!
greatly well done!!
I mean it's hard for me to make backgrounds that good. XD
I enjoyed the story. But I a have to say I think the swords did look like sticks. :(
But it was still Great! I give 5/5 and a 10/10 Cool animation. oT_To
Yuo have a good day!!
Pretty good, could use some work.
The art, the animation, it was beautiful, fantastic even, but the problem is this: I was easily able to look away. In a battle animation, that is the last thing you want. Add some impact sound-effects, some swords clanging, screams, cries, voice-acting.
Your animation is amazing, now work on the other important stuff.
Could be much better
I'm going to be another one of those guys that leaves a fairly negative, but not mean, review. Here's why...
I think you've gotten enough comments on the music, but I have to say it as well. Very poor choice. And it's not because that song isn't my taste (even though it really isn't), but it's because I don't think you should have put mainstream music in a flash like this. My guess is you were trying to be very epic with this (the story, dialogue, etc.). While your animation definitely had a realistic tone, the song just took all credibility away from that. The best way I can explain it is this...it's as if watching the movie Gladiator with Nickelback music as the score. It would make the movie completely unenjoyable, no matter how well it's filmed. So basically, that song was your biggest mistake. My suggestion to you would be to look up some soundtracks to movies and try dubbing in some composed music next time because that's all I can see working for a flash like this. That's just my opinion though.
Also, if you're not going to dub in voices, I would strongly recommend working on your grammar. There were alot of spelling mistakes. Poor grammar can damage your credibility.
Overall, alot of potential but falls short in many aspects.
Some cool stuff.
I like your art style, and this was indeed cool looking. No doubt it took you some time, and you should damn sure be proud.
On the other hand, there are also some setbacks to this. For one thing, I didn't really feel this song fit for this fight scene. I suppose I didn't pay much attention to the lyrics but it sounded more like he was singing about a woman or something and that doesn't really tie in. The music itself seemed a little too slow and not intense enough to be fight music. Voices, and this is a lesson I learned myself, voices will improve your score. Use voices. Another thing, you did seem to take some "animation shortcuts". I got to see a lot of them running or jumping at each other, but as far as blocking or trading blows there wasn't as much as there should have been. Flashes of white light and stuff don't really do a fight scene justice. Take the time to animate even just 5 seconds of close quarters combat here and there and it will come out looking cooler, I promise.
Lastly, the thing that turned me off of this flash the most was your authors comments. I'm willing to believe that you did this all on paper at one point, yes, but the end result showed no sign of pencil drawing. You traced over all of it with flash, so essentially it was done in flash. It's cool that you drew it on paper first, and you can mention that as a cool side note, but don't make it sound like we OWE you a higher score just cause you drew it on paper. To be honest I think you could have done the same thing (and probably in less time) if you had just skipped the paper part and done it all in flash to begin with. When you tell us about how you had to scan all the pages and such, it makes it sound like you're trying to get people to vote higher than you deserve because they feel sorry for you because you had to go through all that work. You chose to do it the long way, for better or worse, so you don't really deserve sympathy. And to color it you ended up tracing everything anyway.
But like I said, this is a good piece and you did take a good bit of time on it. Keep at it and you'll keep improving. I enjoyed it and hope to see more from you in the future.
Some Potential there but.....
I dont know if this is how you wanted it but i felt like a just watched another pointless anime amv with the same lame music. Don't get me wrong, I didnt hate it. I just thought it didn't have a enough substance and would have been better if you laid the whole story out like an episode or movie. Also, like mrdeadhead said this was very cliche. We've seen similar stories countless times. I give u some props on the animation style which I like but I think could have applied it better. Sometimes it seems like u got lazy and took many shortcuts animation wise(i know its not easy to draw it all by paper but come on.) The fight was pretty basic and had little to none creativity(i was very disappointed there). The swords even looked like sticks at times. I see a lot of potential here but u need to learn where to apply your skills and be a little original.