Really nice ^.^
I have guessed the end just by seing the title. Still...
I think that you made something really valuable, only using a pencil and a sheet?
That is new to me :P I like the art-work you did very well on this. the music was nice (im not really in that style of music but i've enjoyed it anyway, it fited really well with the animation)
People that give you Destructive comment are either stupid, jealous or stupid (Yeah i know ive wrote it twice >.>)
Music : 10
Animation : 10
Story : 8.5 (because of the "already seen" story line.)
Action/suspence : 10
So in overall ill give you a 10, ive enjoyed it. Its all what matters.
Ps: English is not my first language either, so i dont care about typos or whatever.