I was hooked since the beginning. Your use of instruments made the sense of a "sanctuary" immediate.
The main melody's introduction at 1:30 was perfect and only continued from there.
Only actual composition qualm is that, at the 3:20ish mark, when everything calms down, I would have gone into a very noticeable and beautiful melody there and ended it at that. While that tends to be a no-no in composition to never bring up something you don't plan on repeating, I think it would have had a very positive and lasting effect on the audience, perhaps leaving them with that bit of the song stuck in their head.
Anyhow, the instrumentation was also great and creative. I wish I had these sounds! Everything was mixed beautifully and this is far more than what I could ever have done.
Wow that was quick. Thanks a lot for reviewing back. Much appreciated.
"I'm writing as I listen, so bear with me."
Haha no problem. I do that too sometimes!
"I was hooked since the beginning. Your use of instruments made the sense of a "sanctuary" immediate."
Phew! I'm glad you think so - it took me a while to think of a good name for this. Before, it was just called "Orchestral Idea" but I thought that didn't have as much of a ring to it *cough* :3.
"The main melody's introduction at 1:30 was perfect and only continued from there."
Great! Although, this doesn't really have a main melody. You can perhaps call the intro's melody the main melody since it's repeated again at the end, but to be honest instead of having a main melody in a climax that I repeat a few times in the track like I usually do, I decided to try and vary my style a little.
"Only actual composition qualm is that, at the 3:20ish mark, when everything calms down, I would have gone into a very noticeable and beautiful melody there and ended it at that. While that tends to be a no-no in composition to never bring up something you don't plan on repeating, I think it would have had a very positive and lasting effect on the audience, perhaps leaving them with that bit of the song stuck in their head."
Hm... I wanted to end it with the beginning's melody because I thought ending it with a totally new melody might feel a bit... unsatisfactory if you get what I mean. Although I see where you're getting at, and I agree it was quite uncreative of me to end with the same melody I started with!
"Anyhow, the instrumentation was also great and creative. I wish I had these sounds!"
Haha, these are East/West sounds. Believe it or not, getting better sounds actually helped me a LOT more than I thought it would. If you listen to my very old song "Ready for Battle", made using crappy free soundfonts, and then you hear the first song I made with East/West a few weeks afterwards, "Cobra", the difference in quality is massive :P. East/West is by far my favourite VST and I'd highly recommend it to anyone!
"Everything was mixed beautifully"
Thanks! Mixing isn't my strong point but I did work hard on it nevertheless.
"and this is far more than what I could ever have done."
Well, I dunno about that, but in any case I'm really glad you liked the track. Thanks a million for the insightful review and hit me up if you ever want to exchange reviews again!
Awesome. I'm just speechless. The different instruments are really fitting between themselfs and my favorite part was when it goes boom at 1:00 and 1:50. That is awesome and I cannot say anything more.
PS : I find it funny how the lowest review is 4/5, that means your music IS epic!
Lol you're like the second person in a row to claim that they might have bad English and then write a review with nearly flawless grammar :P.
"Awesome. I'm just speechless. The different instruments are really fitting between themselfs and my favorite part was when it goes boom at 1:00 and 1:50. That is awesome and I cannot say anything more."
Thanks a lot! I'm relieved to hear that you like the part at 1:00. It was very experimental for me and there were some people who liked it and some people who didn't. And yeah I'm quite proud of the part at 1:50!
"PS : I find it funny how the lowest review is 4/5, that means your music IS epic!"
Well it certainly makes me happy :3.
"5/5, 5/5, Favorited, author favorited, downloaded.
That's the best I can do. Awesome work and I shall listen to more."
Whoa thanks a lot. If you're ever interested in hearing my other songs, you can check out this handy little list of my better songs! http://goo.gl/NyNRh
I really appreciate the support and feedback. Thanks again!
Very well composed! I can think of a very good story that fits into this music. I'll say the main character would be John. I have a lot of details in this story so be prepared for a long review:
Background info: An invasion has been going on. John and other soldiers are trying to fight back the invasion. However, the invaders are winning.
0:00-0:15 - John is walking back through a forest to protect his village.
0:16 -0:20 - However, as he moves the last bush he finds out his village was invaded.
0:21-0:32 - John could not believe it. He looks at each house only to find bits of wood and furniture
and also dead bodies.
0:33- 0:43 - He soon reaches his house that is just the same as the other houses except one room still stands: his parents' room.
0:44-0:57 - Slowly, he lifts the tavern, shaking. Fearing of what to find in there. Then, a single tear is shed from the main character.
0:58-1:06 - He saw the most horrible image that will stick to
his mind for eternity: his parents bodies lying on the floor. Dead with blood oozing out. More tears came. The tears that exploded with anger and revenge.
1:07-1:27 - He prepares in a secret hut. He takes a knife, a map, a sword, and rope. He then put puts on a coat and walks out of the hut.
1:28-1:48 - He travels through a forest, a desert, a mountain range, and exits from another forest. Each scene has different camera views.
1:49-1:57 - Tired from all the walking, he notices a cliff.
1:58-2:10 - John gets a good view of the castle the invaders live.
2:11-2:27 - Night falls, John quietly climbs over the wall with the rope and sneaks past the guards in the courtyard.
2:28-2:56 - A series of scenes happen. John runs a hallway in the background while scenes appear of events where John is sneaking past the guards.
2:57-3:00 - John slows to a stop. He is just outside the king's room.
3:01-3:07 - John creeps behind the king slowly and knocks him out with a punch.
3:08-3:19 - Slowly he takes his sword and with the utmost hatred, drove it through the king's heart.
3:20-4:00 - He returns back to his village (without getting caught) and buries the bodies of his parents. Mourning over their faces as rain continues to fall. A tear from John falls down and makes the last note as it his the ground.
This is just my view on how I interpret this music. Although I do say this piece could also represent someone trying to find safety. Anyway, awesome piece and continue to make great music!
Aw dude that's a really imaginative story. I was following it along with the music and hearing the music fit so perfectly in your story that I got the chills!
Thanks a lot man, really creative scene. I'm glad you liked the track :3.
Oh man... Sanctuary... The song with like 100 reviews... the ultimate challenge as an Audio Reviewer. My review started getting long enough that I needed to split it up into sections, where I would critique individual aspects of the song.
MELODY
Not even gonna bother, the melodies are great. Some are better than others, but I'll get into this in the arrangement section.
MIXING
You've got to be kidding me. The mixing is perfect. Splitting this review up is starting to look dumb. NEXT SECTION
PERCUSSION
Looove. A highlight for me is 1:08 with the vaguely ethnic feel. Also 1:28 with the driving boomy hits. Or the tense tams at 3:11. So much detail work!
ARRANGEMENT
The buildup from 1:00 to 1:20 is really well done and seamless, and the transition at 1:28 is just lovely. Which is good too, because it leads to THE BEST MELODY IN THE HISTORY OF NEWGROUNDS. Alright, that might be *slightly* superlative, but I could really point to only a handful of songs with comparable melodic expressivity to that point, at least on this site.
So let's talk about arrangement - and move in from macro level to micro level arrangement. I assume we're both in agreement that 1:28 is the obvious highlight of this piece. I mean, there is a lot of other great stuff in this piece, but it's not going to top 1:28. So what I think is that 1:28 should come later into the piece. Like, it's the climax, so it should come near to the end, otherwise you're just waiting for the piece to build down, and people are much more willing to let the song build up (rising tension) rather than waiting for the song to build down (falling tension). I think that all the stuff starting at around 2:00 once the 1:28 melody is finally been played out could be moved to the beginning of the song.
While we're talking about it, the thing that I notice that really good artists do is that they'll foreshadow the melody ahead of time. An excellent example of this is "Alone and Adrift" by RetromanOMG (http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/542368) The synth at :29 is really beautiful, and then at 1:00 it develops even more, but once the real melody comes in at 1:23 you realize that everything else was just hinting at that melody, and that makes it even better! So while that 1:28 thing is asdfawesome, you could build up the tension even more and make it better by having hints at the melody earlier in the song. (You may be thinking, ah, that's the thing that johnfn did in "The Fight"! Actually, that was completely unintentional but ... sure.)
The irony is that you do build up a melody which I hear quite a few times through the song - first heard at :36 - but imo it's not as interesting. I mean, it's not bad, and I particularly like that take on it at 1:01 with the crazy chords and trills, but why choose that one when you could have chosen 1:28? :P
Last thing about 1:28 is that the structure of the climax is [BIG 1:28 MELODY] [little 1:28 repeated melody]. In the aim of building up tension for the big melody, I'd suggest to reverse the order, so that you do the quiet idea before the big one. Maybe you could put the melody in a woodwind and tweak it slightly.
I enjoy the stuff towards 2:30, especially that little flair at 2:42 (that was nicely foreshadowed at 2:11, in a different timesig!). I kinda wish we'd hear that flair again, maybe just a little later in a variation.
Again I feel like the arrangement is flip floppy, because this is the great exploration, and 1:28 is where you finally find the treasure!
Last thing: I don't really like that section at 3:03 - it's a tension builder, but it's out of place right near the end of the song, since the next section is very calm and not tense at all.
NIT PICKS
One fun nit pick at 3:43: your melody is building up a lot of tension by wanting to eventually resolve down to the root note (I'm just going to call it C because I only have relative pitch), and the trill ramps up the tension even more... but then you actually hit C as you're going down to B, which dissolves all tension. I really like the idea of drawing out that final resolution though, that plus the OCD timpani roll makes for a great ending.
While the 1:05 trills are awesome and really attention-grabbing, I don't really get what the point of them are (from an arrangement/compositional point of view). They seem to be leading into that hit at 1:07, but that isn't all too obvious.
The other thing I want to nit pick is the quantization errors/humanization you put in. Like 3:31 for example. I mean, if we're to imagine this is being played by a professional orchestra, then they probably wouldn't be making such obvious mistakes. (I was unsure if that was the intent, or if you were going for rubato here - if you were going for rubato then I think you should slow down the entire melody gradually rather than just a singe note.)
On the other hand I like the callback to the melody all the way back at :39. Very nice way to tie the piece together :)
OVERALL
In conclusion, good luck fitting a response to this within the character limit ahahahahh
No but seriously this is great and has a lot of detail - it's amazing that I can write all this about it and still feel like I'm only scratching the surface. I can see why this would be one of your favorite pieces. Is it as good as Encapsulation? Well, this is far more complex, and has far more melodic content, but Encapsulation was arranged much better, and what melodic stuff it had was slightly more mature. So who knows.
...Also Encapsulation was done in 3 days and this was done in a month. That is quite an improvement.
Alright I really need to wrap this thing up. This song is epic, easy 10/10.
Whoaaa, I expected a lengthy review from you but not THIS big. johnfn you da BEST.
"Oh man... Sanctuary... The song with like 100 reviews... the ultimate challenge as an Audio Reviewer. My review started getting long enough that I needed to split it up into sections, where I would critique individual aspects of the song."
Yeah, this track has loads of reviews. It's my most popular track by far. I originally submitted it to a competition but it didn't place in the top 8. On the bright side, however, I landed 31,000 views and nearly 100 reviews, so that's sweet :3.
"Not even gonna bother, the melodies are great. Some are better than others, but I'll get into this in the arrangement section."
For some reason, in this track melodies were never a problem. The melodies all just came to me, which is rare considering what I usually have to go through to make a decent composition.
"You've got to be kidding me. The mixing is perfect. Splitting this review up is starting to look dumb. NEXT SECTION"
I actually think that the mix here is worse than my newer mixes. I find the 3/4 section a bit flat and all over the place. But yeah I was and am pretty proud with this mix otherwise!
"Looove. A highlight for me is 1:08 with the vaguely ethnic feel. Also 1:28 with the driving boomy hits. Or the tense tams at 3:11. So much detail work!"
You know me and my obsession for detailed percussion :3.
"The buildup from 1:00 to 1:20 is really well done and seamless, and the transition at 1:28 is just lovely. Which is good too, because it leads to THE BEST MELODY IN THE HISTORY OF NEWGROUNDS. Alright, that might be *slightly* superlative, but I could really point to only a handful of songs with comparable melodic expressivity to that point, at least on this site."
And that melody was just the result of a minute or two of doodling. And then I spend ages working on the melody for Tomb Shaker and it ends up turning out fairly badly. Brain y u do dis.
But yeah I like that melody too!
"So let's talk about arrangement - and move in from macro level to micro level arrangement. I assume we're both in agreement that 1:28 is the obvious highlight of this piece. I mean, there is a lot of other great stuff in this piece, but it's not going to top 1:28."
In my tracks, the highlights are almost always the climaxes. I still have yet to get the hang of creating meaningful soft sections.
"So what I think is that 1:28 should come later into the piece. Like, it's the climax, so it should come near to the end, otherwise you're just waiting for the piece to build down, and people are much more willing to let the song build up (rising tension) rather than waiting for the song to build down (falling tension). I think that all the stuff starting at around 2:00 once the 1:28 melody is finally been played out could be moved to the beginning of the song."
Totally agree. Either that or I add another climactic section like the first. Buoy suggested that too in his enormous three-account review in pages 17-18 of the review section. I think that might've been just because of time constraints (or maybe because I couldn't be arsed haha).
"While we're talking about it, the thing that I notice that really good artists do is that they'll foreshadow the melody ahead of time. An excellent example of this is "Alone and Adrift" by RetromanOMG (http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/542368) The synth at :29 is really beautiful, and then at 1:00 it develops even more, but once the real melody comes in at 1:23 you realize that everything else was just hinting at that melody, and that makes it even better! So while that 1:28 thing is asdfawesome, you could build up the tension even more and make it better by having hints at the melody earlier in the song. (You may be thinking, ah, that's the thing that johnfn did in "The Fight"! Actually, that was completely unintentional but ... sure.)"
That is an excellent idea. I hear that kind of stuff a lot in pieces from the baroque/classical/romantic era. It makes a lot of sense because right now the 1:28 melody is only there to serve as a high climactic point, when it could sound a lot more developed if I had foreshadowed it a little.
"The irony is that you do build up a melody which I hear quite a few times through the song - first heard at :36 - but imo it's not as interesting. I mean, it's not bad, and I particularly like that take on it at 1:01 with the crazy chords and trills, but why choose that one when you could have chosen 1:28? :P"
Yeah why DID I do that x_x. I personally like both melodies almost equally (I'm slightly more partial towards the 1:28 one though), but arrangement-wise it would've made a lot more sense had I used the 1:28 melody.
"Last thing about 1:28 is that the structure of the climax is [BIG 1:28 MELODY] [little 1:28 repeated melody]. In the aim of building up tension for the big melody, I'd suggest to reverse the order, so that you do the quiet idea before the big one. Maybe you could put the melody in a woodwind and tweak it slightly."
Interesting idea. Would work really well for the 1:42 - 1:47 measures.
"I enjoy the stuff towards 2:30, especially that little flair at 2:42 (that was nicely foreshadowed at 2:11, in a different timesig!). I kinda wish we'd hear that flair again, maybe just a little later in a variation."
Wow, really nice call on that 2:11 foreshadowing thing. That wasn't even intentional but upon listening again I just noticed they're the exact same chords! I guess that's just because I wanted a perfect cadence at both points, but then again at the time I didn't even know what cadences were. I DUNNO.
"Last thing: I don't really like that section at 3:03 - it's a tension builder, but it's out of place right near the end of the song, since the next section is very calm and not tense at all."
Wow, that is a problem I've had with that part for ages now. I agree 1000%. I wanted to transition back from 3/4 to 4/4 effectively but couldn't think of anything other than making a section that's a bit more rubato and less melodic to join them together, and not only did that not even generate a smooth transition, but the resulting section ended up being far too tense for what was coming after it.
"One fun nit pick at 3:43: your melody is building up a lot of tension by wanting to eventually resolve down to the root note (I'm just going to call it C because I only have relative pitch), and the trill ramps up the tension even more... but then you actually hit C as you're going down to B, which dissolves all tension. I really like the idea of drawing out that final resolution though, that plus the OCD timpani roll makes for a great ending."
Oh wow, you're right - it would've sounded better had I not used the root note. WHY DON'T I THINK OF THESE THINGS DAMN IT. Also that OCD timpani roll haha. It's probably the best thing that ever came out of my self-diagnosed OCD.
"While the 1:05 trills are awesome and really attention-grabbing, I don't really get what the point of them are (from an arrangement/compositional point of view). They seem to be leading into that hit at 1:07, but that isn't all too obvious."
Well, partly to lead onto that hit at 1:07, and partly to indicate a sense of danger, since everything before that was serene and calm. I've been criticised for making those dissonant chords and trills too loud, which might make them sound less like a sense of danger and more like a sense of disaster or something haha.
"The other thing I want to nit pick is the quantization errors/humanization you put in. Like 3:31 for example. I mean, if we're to imagine this is being played by a professional orchestra, then they probably wouldn't be making such obvious mistakes. (I was unsure if that was the intent, or if you were going for rubato here - if you were going for rubato then I think you should slow down the entire melody gradually rather than just a singe note.)"
The intent was rubato, or rather just slowing down the melody for the ending's resolution, but again, I agree that it should've been more gradual.
"On the other hand I like the callback to the melody all the way back at :39. Very nice way to tie the piece together :)"
I personally think it sounds a bit forced and would've sounded better if I transitioned properly to it and perhaps played the 1:28 melody instead (except softly of course). But thanks!
"In conclusion, good luck fitting a response to this within the character limit ahahahahh"
IT HAS BEEN DONE.
"No but seriously this is great and has a lot of detail - it's amazing that I can write all this about it and still feel like I'm only scratching the surface. I can see why this would be one of your favorite pieces. Is it as good as Encapsulation? Well, this is far more complex, and has far more melodic content, but Encapsulation was arranged much better, and what melodic stuff it had was slightly more mature. So who knows."
Well, if one track of mine offers any competition to Sanctuary, it would be Encapsulation. That also reminds me that apart from that song, this year I haven't actually made anything that I'm truly proud of, except my Harmony of Heroes arrangement x_x. I mean, I've made some decent stuff this year, but nothing I really poured a lot of effort and work into. It's times like this I wish I didn't have university occupying something like 85% of my time awake.
"...Also Encapsulation was done in 3 days and this was done in a month. That is quite an improvement."
Yeah Encapsulation was just a stroke of luck. I have no idea how I managed to make it in that small time period, and for it to be actually good enough to win the NGMT round it was in. But that is definitely one way of looking at it :p.
"Alright I really need to wrap this thing up. This song is epic, easy 10/10."
Thanks so much for the excellent review. I realise we basically agree on every point, but since when do we DISAGREE on something? Thanks again, this review really is more than I could've ever asked for.
