Lovely
Your flash was very interesting, but unfortunately I felt it a litle too predictable. So much has allready been said about the mundane lifestyle of the human race, and most of it by the people that don't have the courage to break out from their ordinary routine. I do not mean this as an insult to you or anyone else who share simular feelings of being another cog in the ticking clock of life, as I assume that as the poem suggests you are still in high school, meaning that you have little or no control over the situation and are deffinately more inclined to feel unimportant or insignificant. Any way back to the flash, I really enjoyed the juxtoposition of video, flash, and poetry and I thought all three were edited very nicely and effectively portrayed what you wanted to say. The poetry could have been a little stronger, I would recomend some stronger vocabulary and analogies. I would also recomend poets such as Richard Siken or Saul Williams, both of which have great tone and rythem added to their poetry. I would like to see a sequal maybe once you get into college, or not, just to see if your oppinion of the world has changed, and again after you graduate and eneter the working world, or not, just to see if there is any further developement on your thoughts on life. Lastly I would recomend reading some philosophy such as Plato's "allegory of the cave", or Heideggars theory on feild relationships. Good luck to you my friend. 5/5 & 10/10