Great
Smooth animation... pretty tight fighting. I would have to say this was a awesome flash. Good job. Only thing that pist me off was having to line up my mouse just perfectly on the letters of "play" to play the thing.
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mortis5000 responds:
Thanks, Yeah I need to fix that next time.
It was fine.
I suppose I can't say that I enjoyed this submission to much, because I just did not. I found it hard to really relate to any of the things going on simply because I had no idea who any of the people in the submission were. You failed to give us any real introduction and the storyline progression seemed a bit odd because of that. At first it seemed to be a teacher student battle then all of a sudden the student turned evil, with no prior consent to something like that happening. The graphics in this submission weren't bad though, but I found the background a bit dull to be honest with you. I thought the background itself worked well in some areas of the fight, but other parts not so much.
The music itself was good, but some of the screams and other noises that the people made really seemed a bit odd. It just did not fit in well with the fight itself. The terrible grammar in the storyline also seemed a bit odd and took away from the overall of the submission.
All in all I would have to say that this submission is well done, but it just doesn't have anything great or interesting to it. It failed to capture my attention and because of that I did not like it.
mortis5000 responds:
Thank You for the criticism...
I guess I was wrong. You need more training.
I checked out part 1 before watching this one. It was cool to see your improvement over that effort and I actually felt entertained watching this one. However, issues of Flash technique and English grammar hold this one back.
Regarding technique, the choice to make only the foreground pixels of link words clickable was a mistake. A rectangular area enclosing the link words should work as well. Also, the timing of several sections of dialogue was too short. This is especially important when the viewer cannot rewind or pause to catch what they might have missed. While the fade-in done on the characters shown during the loading screen looked nice, this repeated twice for me when I first loaded your movie, which looked bad. Often the sprites' aspect ratio looked off, making the characters squashed or stretched. The looped coughing sample felt jarring when it repeated, and one other sample sounded like a man's dying scream when the character had only collapsed.
Your English grammar and style also needs improvement. Unfortunately, it's quite difficult for me to quote lines without opening your movie up in an editor, and I'm not prepared for that atm. I recommend you find the book Strunk and White's Elements of Style. A book like that would be a great asset for your lines to read well.
Here's a few lines I caught:
"I guess I was wrong you need more training." You did not mark the end of the sentence after 'wrong'. "I guess I was wrong. You need more training."
"You haven't beaten me this easy." You needed an adverb, not an adjective, to modify the verb "beaten". Use "easily", not "easy".
"You need to stay there, your injured." "your" is the 2nd person possessive, you wanted the contraction of "you are", "you're".
Keep up the good work!
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mortis5000 responds:
Thank I like this review ok....
1)I understand what your saying about the flash techinque...I do need more work in that....
2)I understand about the sound...I really do need to get better sounds.
3)My grammar and spelling was a tad bit off...I don't think I need a period after wrong because I wasn't going into another idea, I think all I need there is a comma and that would be sufficient. The second grammar mistake you pointed out was correct and third was also correct...when I retcon this episode I will make sure to absolutely change those mistakes.
Alright
Well a good point to this is that you had sound effects that did work with the animations, so that's pretty good to note. I didn't like how in parts you have things strech over, that didn't look too good and the diolog box could have been done a little better in my opinion. The main plot for this was hard to follow after a while, it just got kind of repetitive.
This could be good to watch for someone who is intrested in mindless fighting with a bit of diolog, but it's not really to my taste, so sorry about that. The lava below the part where they are fighting could be done better, as it is, it just looks like the platform they are on is floating.
2/5
<3
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mortis5000 responds:
Thank You for your review...I must admit that I seen my architectural mistake at the very last minute and couldn't change it...the camera that I was using did cause distortion in some places in the flash...I'm still trying to figure that out.
Way better, but needs more narrative and tweaking
I'm not too keen on this. It's a lot more interesting than the original, but the style of on-screen action isn't to my tastes.
First, it looks a lot sharper - crisper and better, like this time you didn't lose the .fla. Heh.
The buttons need to be improved. Draw a rectangle on your 'hit' frames so we can click in the spaces between the letters, rather than needing to click the strokes exactly.
There were some white bits you forgot to remove in photoshop or whatever, that show up in the speech boxes. Also, the parts of text over the whitish portion of the rectangle are hard to read.
I think you should avoid stretching bitmaps - during the fight, their proportions change and it looks tacky.
I liked how there was more of a narrative during this fight and you tried to inject some excitement with the transformations. With the sfx and all the clouds of dust etc. it looks a lot better.
The negative image of Sean with the aliased brush stroke behind him didn't really fit the pixellated look of everything else though.
It was actually vaguely fun to watch, but I suggest you try and work out some narrative to tie this series together. I mean, straight-up fight scenes can get old pretty quickly, specially considering their ubiquity.
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mortis5000 responds:
Thanks I really enjoyed this review...
I will take everything you said into consideration