well...
i saw some other submission, the *story* was quite normal but still... you made alot a characters there like one there! another one! again! again!again! *flash* *flash* *flash*!!!!!1111 and you got such pwning manga anime style i may put some bad notes on my submission but graphic is MY priority. im about to study in cartoons, jesus i really need to draw like you do !!! O.o (create something else in the same style maybe whit same characters or whatever a least KEEP YOUR PURE ANIME PWNAGE STYLE!!!