Good start
It's a good start but you really need to work on your EQing and mixing. There's so much going on that the highs and lows are fighting each other and the mids are a real battleground. There's some very slight honking in your beats, so you should EQ them to bring down the highs some more and shape the sound.
i have a problem with doing things the right way, i need the kick to push the red. its just my opinion but doing things properly like that is for pop. I think this track would sound shit if it were toned down. yeh the highs are too high and the lows are too low but i kinda like that, ya know?
Thanks for the review and the input!