que buena pieza!
y que bueno que a los de twilight no se les ocurrio pasar aqui si no tu rola hubiera pasado a ser parte de un asco de pelicula XD
pero en fin muy buena pieza y juno a otras que estan en mi preferencia de musica clasica te aventaste otro hit
Ajaja, no vi esa peli! pero si me dices que esta de lo peor, ya la dejo fuera de mi lista de las que tengo que ver :P
Gracias por el apoyo tan grande mi amigo! significa mucho!
Whoops!
You just got majorly tripped up by your style man. All that calming music just sent you flying head over heels down the hill.
Because I don't have very many characters to use, and a lot to get through, please allow me to be purely straightforward. It may seem harsh, I am not intending to be insulting, however, I won't be able to spare the extra diplomacy cushioning, sorry.
Ok. Coupla good motifs. But a bit haphazard and badly blended.
1. Begginning 0:00 to 0:30
This is a good intro. But TOO SLOW. Key words in name and theme. FLYING. WIND.
Both are quick. This is slow. You need to increase the tempo of the entire song. It needs to be faster, lighter, more quicksilver. It needs to SOAR!
2. 0:34 to 0:50. Good motif. Too slow. Too simple for what it's conveying and what comes next. Needs a bit of work. You may want to take a look at the soundtrack from Beyond Good and Evil. http://www.stormeffect.com/beyond/ind ex.htm
It has some excellent pieces, and is well worth listening to.
3. 0:50 to 1:05. Ok. I've identified three separate sections that lead up to a really nice quick part that surprised me. But the parts preceding this and after are let down by the fact that they are separate, and do not lead on one from the other. While they are blended, you need to work them together more cohesively, so that one leads to the next and builds upon what we have heard before.
This is a song about flying, and I'm guessing that 1:05 to 1:21 is the soaring part. You really need to underline that part and draw the listeners on so that they leap forth and really fly with you.
Another point is that the emotion isn't so good either. It's not picking me up and flying me along. This point in particular has a bit too much inflection. Try to watch dynamics a big, soften the note strikes just a touch. There's one thing to go loud and another to go banging loud.
4. 1:05 to 1:21. This was definitely the best part of the song. But it needs better execution. I can hear you stretching yourself, which is really good. But really try to practice it more, as it needs to be a touch smoother and I shouldn't be hearing the slight hitch ups that break the tempo just a touch.
The backing is not helping at all. It greatly undermines the effect by being so low and calming. The background needs to emphasise the foreground, and the foreground build on the background.
5. 1:22 to 1:56. This part does not belong in the song at all. Not only is it like a great big wall breaking our soaring, but it also jarrs with the overall theme. You need to set the listeners down gently, not pulverise them.
Essentially, take this part out, while there is a somewhat smooth transition, there are better ways to do it.
6. 1:57 to end. Nice. In another piece. But this is a piece about flying, and soaring in the wind. Not about life and memory. Thus inappropriate, and far far too slow.
In essence, you've been far too introspective, and inside your comfort zone in this piece. Your natural style doesn't help this piece, rather, it hinders it. You need to only take a few elements of your natural style and get rid of the slower ones. Try to instill a sense of wonder and joy into us as listeners, not a sense of calm and peace.
We are not trying to be zen with the wind. We are trying to fly in it.
Make us fly please.
Sincerely, Krayon.
Oh Man!
Your future is bright!
I love each piece you have shared with us
Thx
Please keep that creativity!
Thanks so much my friend! thanks so much for the support!
Not bad
It's serene... it'ss syncopated, i've heard it from you before and better implemented than in this piece. In the middle of the song, arpeggios weren't expected because of one thing, youre more original than that. LOVED THE OPENING.but alas, you've done better work. I read that this is the first of three pieces, i cant wait to grade them as a whole :3 the nice thing is that a piece like this can really setup well fo future pieces. Can't wait to hear them my friend.
Dave/ Dude09
Hey there my friend! Thanks for the constructive criticism, you know, one of the best things is knowing that it has room for improvement, and your help means a lot.
Lol btw, I made a mistake while I wrote the info of this piece the first time, this is actually the second piece, the first one was "Dwelling at the bottom of the Ocean" that is already on my audio page :P I think the third will be uploaded tomorrow, I'll let you know when it's done, take care and thanks again!
Great
Really good song, I'm amazed! The way it builds in intensity really fits the theme of Wind, dude. Keep up the good work, man, I'm lovin these songs.
That's so cool! thanks for listening!