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this is a first draft of the song? dam dude its freaken sweet. i love how you put it on an acoustic guitar to start off with, honestly i really like this song because of that. your voice isnt bad at all either its simply, catchy, and amazing. not sure if this song will still have the same tone to it if u went electric but either way GL! keep it up man!
You know what it is? I only have an acoustic guitar, so I can only write songs that can sustain themselves with basic melody. Playing solo, you have to fill in the parts that a bass player might, or an extra guitar, or a drummer might fill in for me. If I had a band, I would probably be less accomplished as a song writer. Thank you for the compliments, and remember guys, vote 5/5!
The rough version will sound more natural.
I love it. True music to me expresses itself, within itself. "That's" it.
Thanks, but the vocals need work. I just have to rerecord it, also, the guitar work needs some improvement, I have had time to work on this song some more after I recorded it.
I look forward to the professional version
I can hear that you're a really good guitar player and not a bad singer either! Reminds me of Pearl Jam which is not my fav grunge band but really good nevertheless. Same thing with this one, not exactly my favourite but I did like it and I give you major props 'cause you've got something here! I don't know if the final version will be acoustic or electric but I'm thinkin that if it will be electric you could use some muddy dirty distortion to add some edge to it, since now it sounds a little too clean. Also add volume to the vox!
Yeah, this is just a rough draft. I am thinking electric all the way, but it is nice to know that I could strip it down to this level, an acoustic and a voice, and it still works on emotion and melody alone. I'm going to sing it more rough and in key too when I re-record. I know my voice sucks on this, but it was done on a first take, I didn't go back to fix anything.
Mixed Bag
Lyrically, you're pretty prolific. Your singing leaves something to be desired though.
Thanks man. I like the lyrics too. I'm talking about purgatory, and sins and when you die your soul is supposedly burned in fire to absolve you of your sins. I'm not religious but I liked the concept. Like holding metal over fire to kill germs. Holding yourself over the fire to kill the impurities in your heart and soul just sounds cool for me.
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I feel like the song is lacking some low end presence, and the vocals are too far back in the mix. Perhaps some light chorus and fundamental boosting on the vocals(as well as overall signal boost by 6-10dB or so), and just some mid/low end emphasis on the rhythm guitar, with more high end emphasis on the lead to give them more separation. Melodically the track is pretty spot on, enjoying the progresions and the leads go together well harmonically, but the mixing needs help.
Cheers!
- LD -