Nice guitar work.
I've been playing guitar for about 12 years now, and while I like the technical stuff, sometimes the best players need to know when to keep it simple and just let the music speak for itself. This is a good example. Great job, and I like the lyrics, too.
Thanks. I appreciate the simplictiy of music. The problem with the music today is that they try to add too much. It makes for a less memorable song. Sure, people dance to it in the moment, but it doesn't stick in your mind the way a simple song does. Nirvana is famous for that, simple and to the point.
I look forward to the professional version
I can hear that you're a really good guitar player and not a bad singer either! Reminds me of Pearl Jam which is not my fav grunge band but really good nevertheless. Same thing with this one, not exactly my favourite but I did like it and I give you major props 'cause you've got something here! I don't know if the final version will be acoustic or electric but I'm thinkin that if it will be electric you could use some muddy dirty distortion to add some edge to it, since now it sounds a little too clean. Also add volume to the vox!
Yeah, this is just a rough draft. I am thinking electric all the way, but it is nice to know that I could strip it down to this level, an acoustic and a voice, and it still works on emotion and melody alone. I'm going to sing it more rough and in key too when I re-record. I know my voice sucks on this, but it was done on a first take, I didn't go back to fix anything.