Hey, Not bad!
Not bad. Way better then I expected for a first flash. The Point of View was unique and it was decent. However...
1. Background music?
2. The subject- I may be blowing smoke but that might not be the greatest subject to do a flash about...
3. More of a story?
By the way, you're not a n00b. You seem like more of a newb. There's a difference; ask someone if you can't get it. Good job!