Reviews for Blind - part 1

[SLUGFly]

not so bad

the previous review was a bit harsh...

some very important advice for you:

1-watch your flash before submitting it... look for places where text is cut off or not readable

2-make voices... even bad voices are better than no sound at all

3-expand the story and characters more

4-stop writing "1" in subtitles... use "one" instead.

5-for the love of god, get away from the anime, the stuff dilutes creativity and finally kills it in favor of "excellence of reproduction" I'm not referring to your drawing style so much as I am the poorly written story, the Japanese names (you're not japanese) and especially the use of Japanese in the movie... Sensei is teacher, say teacher instead... saying sensei is trying to be "cool" like anime and it just won't work. Katana works for katana because it's a type of sword (also sai, shuriken, etc) but sensei is just a normal word that means teacher...

6- (part of #5) read short stories and/or novels... devour them... be better than them

Slein1 responds:

thank u for this commment, it's helpful a lot better then the last ONE.;p
About the text cut-off, Ireally don't kno how to fix it, It fits when Im in flash, but when checking the movie it's cut off, I make it smaller, same problem. :S
About using sensei, I've done karate in the Netherlands and we had to call our 'teacher', sensei and so I'll keep doing that and I don't think it's wrong.
Ill go further into the story in part 2, as planned.

[creamachine]

OMG

Jesus christ this movie makes me want to kill myself for living in a world in which this type of shit can exist. If u have any sense of good and bad, stop animating as soon as you read this! This had the gayest plot i've ever seen. I don't usually review this extensively, but the sheer magnitude of the shitty nature of this film compelled me to do so. Please, I BEG YOU TO NEVER ANIMATE AGAIN!

Slein1 responds:

I think ur an asshole, comments are welcome as long as they can help me, this one can't. Also, in case u haven't noticed, both of my submissions scored better then urs, so as soon as uve learned to give proper reviews and animate more then just stick figures, be my guest.

[Mitsu]

good...

But could be alot better.

[magicalkiwi]

dude! awesome!

i'd like to see more of this i like the style no voice action but music in the background. kickass

[omusubi]

Needs Some Work

This was okay, the sound was decent, although you need to make sure you read your subtitles and check for grammar/spelling errors next time. The graphics were so so, huge anime eyes, I don't feel, are the way to go. Try leaning a bit more towards realism. Also, consider making the lineart of your backgrounds thinner than your animated characters in the foreground. Consider shading your backgrounds, it wouldn't be hard since they aren't animated, and it would add a lot of depth to your flash.