Bad but could be better
The main problem with this one is the Pace.
You got some good jokes , but you need to increase the JPM or Jokes Per Minute.
Many of the scenes need to be trimmed to 1/2 or 1/3 of the lenth.
Sometimes you just sit and watch the same boring thing, wondering when will this scene end?!
The worst part is that it plays the scenes two times, so the second time it is even more drawn out.
You got good ideas and good jokes. Just try increasing the Pace of the film a little.