A little gay
That was a little gay. But it was good. It made me tear up, on the inside. You could make then ending better. He should have jumped off the cliff. That would make it alot better if you ask me.
Reviews for "Tears of Red"
immortaltechnique responds:
lol .. what makes u people think they were gay?? koz they shook hands??
they hit each other?? ... oh yeah u could just smell the homosexuality there!!
haha
thanks for the score
they were gay
gay gay gay gay
the first gay flash i have seen
dont get me wrong i have nothing agaist gays hell my fav cousin is even gay
this was a very good flash tho it was a little predictable
immortaltechnique responds:
LMAO theyre not gay!! hahaha
leave tha fags alone aite
haha
Excellent, despite a few minor flaws.
This is a wonderfully put-together movie - appropriately simple and emotionally powerful.
I especially liked the use of the limited palette - it is very effective in establishing the mood and acts as a common thread to tie the story together visually. The music is absolutely perfect, as well.
The text was where I encountered the most in the way of sticking points. Your ellipses (...'s) were hit-or-miss at best and excessive at worst. (1) There should be no spaces between ellipses and text.
(2) Ellipses are three dots when at the beginning or between parts of a sentence and four dots when ending a sentence (i.e., an ellipsis plus a period.)
E.g.:
You fought for me.... <-- end of a sentence.
...you even died for me. <-- beginning of a sentence
You always said we'd meet here...
...when the last leaf fell. <- middle of a sentence
You got it some of the time, and I realize that there's a certain amount of leeway you have as far as artistic license, but in this case I felt that some of the five-dot ellipses detracted from the work and made an otherwise quite professional production seem amateurish.
Another irksome detail was the interaction of the young characters - the "WTF?" was rather out of place. A simple question mark might have been more appropriate.
The worst error I saw was a simple, but extremely unfortunately placed spelling error: It's "fought" - not "faught." If you fix nothing else, PLEASE fix this!
Other than these few minor textual things, this is an excellent piece - especially for a first submission. Keep up the good work!
- Neba
immortaltechnique responds:
Talk about a professional review!
thanks for taking your time and putting effort into this review for my flash work. So far, you hav been the only person to mention the ellipses and itz amazing to see how much people actually pay attention to detail!
im currently brainstorming ideas for a new flash project, but as soon as i have some time i will edit those mistakes.
thanks for the review and the score! :D
well done!!!
this is very well done, there were a few mistakes, like just before when the guy gets stabbed, it shows the next set of words before there supposed to be there. and just a few small mistakes. but overall very well done, i loved the movie!
immortaltechnique responds:
yeah i noticed that a while after i handed it in :D haha
thanks for that
Good work
I really enjoyed this. There were a few problems with text placement and a mispelled word (fought not faught), but other than that, really great and very touching.
immortaltechnique responds:
thanks kangaroo