Sloppy and contrived
and completely unoriginal. Sloppiness is the way the words are arranged on the page; contrived and unoriginal are the forced message you are conveying. There are no graphics to speak of (horrible font) and the music may be pretty but it's so shlocky it makes things even worse. Next time try storyboarding and planning.
wow
ok well thats cool, make up for innability to make any good flash of any kind by havind meainingful words in the background, what a cheap blow.
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wtf was that?☻
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The message you were trying to get across may have been good, or not, I didn't really see a point in it at all... The fact of the matter is... theres no real skill required to make this thing. I mean there was no real animation... just some stupid, repetative bullet flying across the top of a screen with a white background and then some words. It's annoying and pointless and more importantly not entertaining. People watch these flashes to get a laugh, or maybe see some action or see a dramatic presentation, but this was just stupid. I hope the next thing you post on here, assuming you do make another post, is less of a waste of time to watch. Even if you can't draw. which I'm not saying you can't because I can't tell from the bullet, you can at least make some crappy little characters to animate, like South Park style. Those characters are pretty crappy and that show's been on for what? 9 years? Talent isn't necessarily the key to a good flash, but effort is.
omg
is this flash promoting guns by any chance...err yes. what's worrying is that it had references to Iraq and the american high-school shootings of late.
"make people understand" ?! wth, im sorry miss, but get ur morals straight before releasing something like this again.
plus its NOT a poem - where's the rhythm?! what about its metre? and like ANY figurative techniques other than an attempted metaphor, "bullet" to something else. although, if that isn't a metaphor then im seriously worried that you plan to go on a shooting with ur boyfriend or whoever the "angel" is.
messed up, get ur morals, literary techniques and general flash up to scratch and THEN it might be worth a look.
still, at least it moved and played pretty music :/
It's not promoting guns, it's just symbolism