Tell me the story...
It started off great, but then it kind've got repetitive until 1:30 where it felt like a lot of momentum started to build. The melody is awesome by itself, but it wouldn't hurt to change the melody while keeping the same rhythm and general idea. Also, the song kept at the same pitch keeps the song a little stale, but maybe you were looking for a more stable melody. I think this song would sound a lot better if you reached a few high notes for a stronger dramatic effect (since your with someone close), or from the low transition at 1:30 build it up to a higher octave (cause that is what I was anticipating), or maybe even add some pedal or an ambient effect. It's not bad to keep it level as it is, because then it would be a well written peaceful background. It felt like the song was supporting the moment rather than describing the moment that one would feel. Like supporting the story while it is being told rather than telling the story itself. These are just opinions though. I look at what people are trying to create and I try to situate myself in the author's scenario and tell them if "I'm there." I wasn't quiet there for this one, but it turned out to be a great piece anyways. Hope some of this will help. Keep up the good work. (Definitely beats many other songs I've heard on new grounds, I only rate the ones I think have potential or are already the best I think they can be) =)
