It actually brought tears to my eyes.
I teared up, possibly because I'm an emotionally sensitive wimp, but more likely because I associated this story with having two brothers, and the feelings of jealousy and competition against each other, when we were young. I made this comparison too soon though, and I definitely didn't expect that ending. But then again, unpredictability is not a bad thing.
Keep it up!
Nice. touching.
I never thought toast being dropped in a trash can could be so dramatic, and touching.
So, I mean, clearly this movie symbolizes women fighting with each other, right? And the lengths they'll go to to get their man/attention? Right?
Anyways, down to business. The animation was pretty good, but could use lots of improvement. Tweens were decently molded, but it coulda looked a lot smoother/sharper. Great song, good setup.
Since the message of the film was written out directly when you click on his left eye, I can only sum up a better resolution for the end of the flash......
Do not trust the shover robot. Do you have stairs in your house?
Very moving
I think everyone's experienced something like this in their lives, you've captured difficult emotions in your cartoon. The title sort of gives away the ending, but it also underlines the sadness of the piece. Very nice.
Praise + Suggestions
i loved the concept, and i loved how the first robot's face was sad even when smiling. good stuff!
i felt you took something away from the robot's character though when he grabbed the axe. it was hard to sympathize with him afterwards, though i am glad it was nothing suicidal. perhaps he could have been set up by the other robot, who then would have killed him for his 'just' cause.
the human could have been more detailed to match the robot. when he held the blanket up to his face, it didn't match and looked slightly awkward
intercut titles are nice, but maybe a few too many at the beginning. they tend to raise expectations very high, as in a feature length film. I say keep them for the end in shorts.
also, and this may be personal preference, but i would have found the whole thing much more artistic if it were in black and white. honestly, just try it and see how it looks :)
just a few ideas,
-spectre757
hey there, thank you for the suggestions! I found them all to be very helpful and agree that all of them would almost definitely help to make the movie better.
I don't think I will bother changing things in this particular movie, but I'll keep your advice in mind working on my other movies. Thanks again!
good story, but he could have becomed a robot pirate :D