Hey Man
i know your a begginer , dont put your self down , it was a good flash yup :) , what you need to to is plan on paper what your aims are , sort of like a script , that way you dont get side tracked at the end , sounds could do with a bit of sharpining up , again your a begginer , to have the patience to make that and subbmit it man you must be determined , hope to see your future flash's , keep up the good work :P