WTF?
Okay, I'm a huge Broken Saints fan... and I really hope it Brooke or one of the crew that posted this here. If you're just checking out Chapter 14 then you're doing yourself a HUGE disservice to this series. Check out their homepage and watch the thing from beginning to end and you'll be blown away! It's got a slow beginning ('cause it actually takes time to establish the characters) but believe me, by the end you'll be gripping your seat begging for more. And as for the submitting of chapters to NG for review, this is totally the wrong one. I'd go with Oran's intro chapter, much more intriguing and earlier in the plotline to interest potential viewers. This one is WAY too slow for the casual viewer to pick up on a whim.
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