I don't get it...
Overally it was good considering what it was... but I don't understand why you chose to express it the way you did. The entire thing was no different than a novel with pictures. It was reading dialogue while 4 characters stood there motionless. The dialogue was good, I'll admit, but that's not what I come to newgrounds for. The one action scene was decent though.
Of course, this probably required a butt-load more work than I'm giving you credit for, and I'm probably being so harsh simply because I have no experience at all with this sort of stuff. Just try to eliminate the irrelavent one liners to move the plot along better. "bring the prisoner to me, I wish to see him" was kind of a no brainer that could have been removed without taking anything away from the piece, and would have moved the plot along a little better.
Best of luck on your next piece of work.