On the Right Track
I really enjoy the melody and the structure of the piece so far. The only issue I have is a lack of a solid drum beat in the background. I'm a drummer, and this really irks me when the samples in the background can't seem to keep a beat together.
I would try to make the beat simpler, or at least clean it up so that the snare at least comes in on beat 2 and 4 consistently, barring any razzmatazz you throw in as fills.
Once you do that I think you could even bring the drums out a little, as in make them a little louder. Then I'd give you at least a 9, probably a 10.
I'm still voting teh fyyve, though.