Lovely!
Thank you for the kind comment on my profile! As such, I decided to take a look at some of the things you were working on, and this immediately caught my eye because it's a track I've been fond of singing in the past few days (well, sort of singing. I have a cold). Oh, the theme gives me shivers. It's got one brilliant trance remix, which is how I first heard of it, but the original is great.
That said, while the sounds you've used in here sound kind of unpolished, the arrangement is beautiful. I think you could expand on it by removing a few layers and going on a solo instrumental for a few measures at the end of this loop, for a contemplative breakdown-- just a pause, as if allowing for a musical reverie.
Keep up the work-- it sounds like you're coming up with quite a bit :)