I'm sorry to say this but...
Ok look, I'm not going to review this audio by your personality, but the quality of it... and I'm sorry to say, well not really, but it's very bad. On the good side, you actually made your own song/rap...and the bad side, the lyrics sucked. I also must say how you went a higher octave during the song which made this really unbearrable to hear. Terrible drums, cheesy piano, off beat, is there more to say? I also disliked your voice...by the sound of that audio you were using Fruity loops. Now, if you want to make your un-hit puberty voice change, you can download audacity and change the pitch without changing tempo. Then u add a new channel to fruity loops called sampler. Then finally you load the wav. file you made with audacity, and there you have it.