nah
Close to being total crap . The graphics looked like you drew them in 10 minutes . The motion was crap and I didn't find it funny at all . Only thing that was good about this movie was the music which was a good pick . Overall 3 .
Reviews for "Don't Eat the Doughnut"
cheshirepus responds:
Yeah, it's really difficult to have my first few submissions (like this one) up on the Portal when my skills have increased so much more since this was submitted, but... you just have to remember that this movie was the second submission I had that passed judgement. That, and I hadn't been using Flash for more than about three months. So yes, by my standards today, I probably could draw the symbols in this movie in 10 minutes. However, back when I made this, it was a personal achievement that I was very proud of, and still am today.
I'm glad you liked the music, though. And thanks for your honesty; I always appreciate genuine criticism.
It's different
I kinda hoped that the boss had eaten the doughnut.
CONTINUITY
... thats my one word suggestion. look it up and make some non-crap. okay, ill be ncie and tell you what it means. it means, if someone is smoking a cigar, and its half gone, then in the next scene it shouldnt all be there!
you had the donut still on teh desk in the last scene only partially obscured by the dude. the clocks hands reverted to 10 somethign when it was already lunchtime at 12 15. haha, reverse taht to 12 51 and you have a great strokes song, the musics video is tron-esque, gotta love taht tron. but tahts besides the point. the hands disapeared completely in one scene! furthermore, the opening still dragged a bit. this is flash, we dont care about you, we definetly dont care about "and james" so just cut to the punchline and hope it sticks. well guess what, it didnt. that kind of style which you tried to carry over in the scratch lines and music but failed oh so horribly, is best used in REFERENCE TO THE PAST! or at least making fun of old film strips. that 70's show does it best. i believe you went for taht styel in this case because you have no sense of pace and thought, hey, lets just pretend is a low key oldie flik and itll fit fine. it didnt. everything draged, i was never fully engaged accept when i found another flaw to point out, and it wasnt funny. another thing, NO ONE EVER SAID DONT EAT THE DONUT! in old film strips the motto is driven into youre skull like a gold stake at union RR. to quote a hugely more succesfull film using this style, "duck, and cover. duck, and cover." repeat about 20 tiems throughout the film and its believable. well, maybe that is believable becasue it uses actuall sound from old film strips, but taht goes to show how very real it actually is! in short, this was sloppy, and its old. i watched youre newest one, and, well, it too is sloppy. better animation, and the only reason people like it is because of the thought, but still it lacks pace. things take to long or move in odd ways never leading up to anything, never building only draging. and god, please god let this poor soul learn that we at NG at effing tired of dark red gradients held together by a circular outline! IT BLOODY DOESNT LOOK LIKE FIRE!
cheshirepus responds:
I seriously think you have some personal issues that need resolving. You're just rambling a bunch of incoherent nonsense here.
Doughnut!
Wow! I like doughnuts filled with mind numbing, brain atrophying, claw my eyes out boredom! Just like this one! So thank you creator!
Booooorring
Well animated with a kinda good storyline, shame I died of boredom....