Well, here we go.
I promised you a big review a while ago, here it is:
Intro (0:00-0:42) - This intro is exceptionally long, and very mellowed out and, as expected, deep. So, in that, it does its job, just it is a tad long and such. Maybe cut it back a bit. (2.5/3)
Body 1 (0:43-1:12) - This part of the song does a pretty good job in showing the melody, and the beat isn't too bad. I'm not much into a lot of deep trance, but it fits the genre to a tee, so I can't fault you on that. (1/1)
Break 1 (1:13-1:23) - This establishes of a bit of change in the song, and leads to body 2. Not much else to be said, but its placement is pretty effective. (1/1)
Body 2 (1:24-2:07) - This part is basically a continuation of Body 1, which means it scores basically the same. (1/1)
Break/Body 3 (2:08-3:32) - The break is a lot less pronounced, and the melody dips around a bit in this area, so I'll compile it into one section. This area has some variety, and some repetition. Not much else to be said. (.5/1)
Denoument (3:33-end) - The ending is a bit better at ending the song than the intro is at beginning it, due to the difference in lengths. Although, after around 3:42 there is literally no sound left playing (maybe there is, but I'd have to turn my volume hella high up to hear it), so you may wish to simply cut off those extra few seconds of time from the track. (2.5/3)
For the actual song structure you get an 8.5/10, not terribly bad, not awesomely good. However, now for the lil' "do I like it" factor.
Personal Preference (n/a-n/a) - Well, as mentioned, deep trance really isn't my genre, though I do occasionally stumble over a track of it that I enjoy. However, even for trance, this song is a bit repetetive for the majority without any real pattern to it (which, unfortunately, loses you points in my book). However, for a first attempt, it wasn't too bad. (3.5/5)
Overall score: 12/15 = 8/10. 4'd.