kind of cute, huge potential

I didn't mind the audio quality -too- much, considering you put subtitles. There was only one grammatically awkward part, so your English really isn't terrible at all.

As for the voices, the demon's voice annoyed me. It's my own personal preference, but I just didn't like it. In general, you were almost monotonous with the voice acting. You could liven things up. Even if you're "depressed", try not to make it sound like you're reading a script.

There were no spelling errors I noticed, which is a huge bonus.

Your artwork was cute. I assume you're using a tablet. There's not a lot of movement though, in regards to animation. It's very static.

The story itself is a little too childish in my opinion. I'm not saying that loneliness is something people should get over, but because you dropped us off into the story, there was no real emotional connection to the demon. It needs more details, more background, more dialogue.

All in all, for your 3rd/4th flash animation, this was a great job. If I may suggest, since English isn't your first language, you can always try speaking in your native language, with subtitles. This can also give you more characters, if trying to change your voice hurts.

My whole reveiw:

Graphics: 9/10
Amazing graphic for a first-timer on NG. I felt like you were familiar with Flash.
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Story: 8/10
The whole "emo" thing seems overdone, but you did take a somewhat new take on it. Kudos.
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Voice: 7/10
Hint: If you do voicings again, get a better mic, or don't speak so directly into it. It was very static-y and often faded in and out.
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Re-watch value: Medium
Many of the "emo" stories are the same, and very few of them can bring it to a whole new level. You are almost there, but not yet. Work a little more on the graphics to bring it to pro-level. You have talent, but you must make the raw material into gold.
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Overall: 8/10
It's a good flash, and I wouldn't be surprised if it makes the Daily Features. Just work on your graphics and get a better mic.
Otherwise, amazing job!

P.S. There are many flash tutorials on NG, look for em. Many of them are really helpful.

Nice

So this was your first submission i read..
Wow, i'm impressed to see a first-submitted movie being this good.

The voice-acting wasn't that bad actually =O
Keep it up, i hope to see more of you ^^

Good flash, voice acting needs work.

The art was very well done, all in all. But the voice acting on this was, I must admit, terrible. I was surprised to read afterwards you did both voices. But I could tell you were going through the lines in a sing-song voice. I would have suggested you sing it straight or try to find a friend to. Again, the art, theme, story was great, but over shadowed by audio flaws.

interesting..

i gotta admit, at first i did not read your description and just decided to watch the movie, and all due respect to those individuals, but i thought this movie was about being a lesbian XD
but seriously, it's not too bad, especially for not using flash long, you are a pretty decent artist.. the only huge problem was the voice quality.. like FoyvenMaven stated: "The voices were hard to understand, sometimes annoying and usually overpowered by the music."
other than that though, not bad!