WOW!
For your first submission here at NG, this is incredibly AWESOME. The story is sad at the beginning but at the end it's happy. You are a different person. You dont like to make funny animation, but meaningfull. This story made almost CRY!
5 from me!
Waaah you really think so? xD You make me sooooo happy T^T. Thanks for the compliment <3333.
AWESOME~!
It looks damn good for your first submission.
Even though it isn't so cool on the graphics and the voices don't sound too well it just looks good and sends the message around ^_^.
If you just aren't good with english voices just use your maternal language and subtitle it :)
p.s. the music fits perfectly.
I give this 8 stars, 5/5 and hope that you will strive for perfection.
Hope to see more stuff from you ^_^
p.p.s: the angel's voice sounded good :P
Thanks for the nice comment and advice <3. I'll try my best on the next submissions <3.
My whole reveiw:
Graphics: 9/10
Amazing graphic for a first-timer on NG. I felt like you were familiar with Flash.
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Story: 8/10
The whole "emo" thing seems overdone, but you did take a somewhat new take on it. Kudos.
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Voice: 7/10
Hint: If you do voicings again, get a better mic, or don't speak so directly into it. It was very static-y and often faded in and out.
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Re-watch value: Medium
Many of the "emo" stories are the same, and very few of them can bring it to a whole new level. You are almost there, but not yet. Work a little more on the graphics to bring it to pro-level. You have talent, but you must make the raw material into gold.
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Overall: 8/10
It's a good flash, and I wouldn't be surprised if it makes the Daily Features. Just work on your graphics and get a better mic.
Otherwise, amazing job!
P.S. There are many flash tutorials on NG, look for em. Many of them are really helpful.
Waaah thank you so much for the long and helpful review <3. I've been playing around with Flash for a while but nothing really came out until this xD. Thanks a lot , I'll try harder next time :D
WELL I SEE
well you got docked on the voices becuase they are so hard to hear without turning up the volume, the animation was fair not that there was much movement involved it would have been simple to move the graphics about, not much of a story line unless this was an introduction to your sieries and it is able to break off into that you left that open if you started with this and made a flash back.
but we need those vocals up if you continue into a series so work on that
enjoy newgrounds everyone
Thanks for the first comment <3. The microphone was useless I see >.>. Maybe I should just remove my voice :(. Thank you anyway, I'll try my best to improve :D :D :D
kind of cute, huge potential
I didn't mind the audio quality -too- much, considering you put subtitles. There was only one grammatically awkward part, so your English really isn't terrible at all.
As for the voices, the demon's voice annoyed me. It's my own personal preference, but I just didn't like it. In general, you were almost monotonous with the voice acting. You could liven things up. Even if you're "depressed", try not to make it sound like you're reading a script.
There were no spelling errors I noticed, which is a huge bonus.
Your artwork was cute. I assume you're using a tablet. There's not a lot of movement though, in regards to animation. It's very static.
The story itself is a little too childish in my opinion. I'm not saying that loneliness is something people should get over, but because you dropped us off into the story, there was no real emotional connection to the demon. It needs more details, more background, more dialogue.
All in all, for your 3rd/4th flash animation, this was a great job. If I may suggest, since English isn't your first language, you can always try speaking in your native language, with subtitles. This can also give you more characters, if trying to change your voice hurts.
Hmmm I guess I'll go for my first language next time, because I believe trying to speak English makes my voice monotonous :(. I did use a tablet xD. Thanks for the advice and comment ne <3