Cool
This is pretty good, but I think it would be better if the beat came in sooner around when you had the... part where you went down the scale rather quickly, and then got way more intense, because at that point it seems like the song is going to go somewhere cool, but it just slows down and comes into a sort of awkward buildup. Maybe you know the part that I'm talking about. You've got the good ideas in here, but I think if you just listened to it and tried to feel where the music is leading you as a listener (not as a composer) and work with that.
It's good, I like it, not perfect, not really close, but close enough for a 7. It'd be cool if you redid this a little.