Author's Response:
all very helpful and true sorohanro. To be honest this is the earlier version of the song, but most of what you say applies to that song to. The thing with this song was it was a very new angle for me to shoot, and I suppose I did very well go and just trip over thirty or so potholes on my way to the end. Still, I am proud of this piece, and to whom it is dedicated. This song helped me understand several new aspects of creating music, you must understand, since I personally don't know ANY music theory what-so-ever, I learn by trial and error, and though many errors may have been done with this piece, they were definatly useful for learning.
Thank you for your thoughtful review.