XayberOptics said it best

It's lacking a distinct melody. Perhaps something in the highs that takes all or most of the listener's attention (1:44-2:22 is an example of such a high-pitched melody, but it didn't work too well for me).

There's too much tamburine before the 2:52 mark. Either lower the volume to make it more subtle or make some variation through automations to make it less constant.

What I'm listening to now up until 3:44 is sounding too repetitive. As a listener I'm getting kind of tired of it.

Nice conclusion (with a little too much drum before it, making this sort of "chopper" effect that didn't really work out too well for me)

Overall a very balanced work (with the best part at around 0:55-1:20, where you showed the "personality" of your track), but it needs more personality and variation.

Nice job, nonetheless.

Ka-fucking-zoo.

I hear it....

Not bad at all, however...

... it is lacking a distinct melody (i.e., something that "hooks" the listener). It also seems like the middle channel is not standing out enough in the mix inspite of the stereo imaging being well placed. Let me try something and I'll send you a file. :) Anyway, keep up the great work! You're definitely going in the right direction!

Rockin'. Oh crap!

I forgot I still have to finish my arrangement of your "Endless Confrontation" piece. This is a great reminder of that tune; I'm not sure if it's the similar instrumentation or chord work that throws this one back to it, but the similarity is very cool.

The addition of a bass soundfont, by the way, is music to my ears. :)

Keep up the good work, Shawn.

~Joshy676

P.S.: Sorry about reviewing this so late. I've heard it five times since it's been up and kept forgetting to review it! :D