Not bad
Not a bad song at all, the lyrics are good, as well as the mood you tried to set - I think you did a good job of it. It's a pretty long song too which is nice, it shows you actually put effort into it.
I can hear the queens of the stone age influences in here which is cool too.
I've had this song playing for like 20 minutes and it seems pretty bearable. I'm not sick of it yet, just been jammin out playin a game and it sounds good man.
Only thing I noticed is that I think you could have beefed up the percussion a bit. I think that would sound a bit better.
Keep up the great work.
-RRC-