freakin awsome

dude ur songs r the best u should some up on youtube ud get alot of hits

wow...

man,i loved it.. i added at favorites... you rock dude and how can i get q full free version of fl studio¿

pretty sick

i can feel my soul becoming blacker as i listen to this.
the only thing i would change is throw in a heavy ass kick and listen to VisionsOfDoom's guitar suggestion. and crank the motherfuckin gain even higher on whatever amp ur using

rock on, Lorens

not bad

for a rock and metal sound i use a Washburn X29,

good stuff

ok... the BEST way to make your guitar sound better would be to simply let me do it^^

anyways, scrap that yamaha and use a gibson. and turn up the bass. to FULL volume.
and you put more emphasis on creating a rhythmic feel by reducing the length of the notes (e.g. in the part that starts at 0:16), not letting the chords ring for several bars without palm-muting the strings. that always sounds quite messy to me. just think of a concise rythm and then hammer it on a tape.

and about the song, well it kinda lacks melody. it just sounds like a backing track.

I suggest writing a solo for the beginning of the song first 8 bars, until 0:16), as kind of an intro to provide atmosphere. and thats were the lyrics are supposed to start, and last for 16 bars until 0:48. that's were the C-part starts (right?). It kinda sounds like a break, which is a good thing, so you could simply leave it like that.

the part that starts at 01:58 sounds quite distinct, imo the guitar simply should double the melody of the bell-sounding thing.

overall 8/10.

hope I provided you with some good ideas, just keep up the good work this song has some real ass-kicking potential if you crank it up (a real good drummer would be nice as well).