you could become good

Pretty good for a first song. Alot better than MY first song. It's too bad to be on NG. I'm am 100% sure it would get a score of like 2.3 (overestimated guess). If you keep on working on your skills, (took me 6 months cause I started in april 2009) you could make some really good jumpstyle/techno stuff. But try to add a background sound in there and make it not so repetitive. The surprising thing about this 1st song is that people would actually dance to this.