Its ok, its actually pretty cool
The good things I like.I like the choir and violin. I like where you were going with this. I kinda like the melody and the song is kinda dark.
The problems I hear is the drum loop seems to cut off early in some parts. So in that case the drums loop just doesnt make a smooth transition to the next part. Around :30 you added some buzz sound; including another at 1:05 that really ruined it which I though didnt blend very while with all the other instruments. After a whie the clarity of the song gets really distorted. At some parts it sounded like there was just too much instruments not blending in.
Besides that its ok. Keep up the work.