it's missing something

the guy below me said it better than I ever could. I was just going to say you needed some more layers, haha.. But it's not a bad song. Just needs some more work.

Not Bad...

But not really good either. I understand simplicity is not always a bad thing. but even slow, quiet songs need layers.

I think the melody and harmony lines go well together. But there is no percussion at all. Nor is there anything other than two instruments playing a duet.

Now yea, this isn't terrible by any means. But it could be a whole lot more than what it is. Drums always help, no matter what the sound you are going for.

You should have more chord structure going on. Chords really give a song flavor. And that is something this is lacking terribly.

Not only does this song need a lot of what I said above, but it also needs more instruments/sounds. I talked above about layers. You can add layers to the harmony, or even to the melody. Either way, it really fills up space and gives you the full sound you need.

If you don't know what I mean by layers, you should go listen to a few of my songs. Acoustic Fun and Dancing Banjo Duet come to mind first. They both really have a ton of layers melodically, and harmonically.

2/5 and 4/10 overall, because it is utterly transparent musically.

Best of luck on your future projects man.

-Gravey-

nice

reminded me of chrono trigger (snes) er keen er something like that. Would make awesome video game music!

Great. Here's a suggestion

I really liked the song. I think it would fit really well in a small-town setting for a video game. It reminds me of FF7's small town musics.

There were a couple times where the song seemed to get too busy (1:47 and 1:05). If you were to eliminate a couple notes from there, I would give a 10.

Calm, surprisingly eerie.

I liked it. Really lightens AND darkens the mood, if you know what I mean.

Some was random and flat out strange, but it was still kick-ass. :P

-Josh