Not bad, needs a lot of work
The writing's pretty poor, and full of spelling mistakes. That must be fixed.
Reviews for "CYOAA"
Patricoo responds:
One day..... One day...
look its a good concept but
theres pretty much no pictures
no music
the pictures you actually have suck
no offence this is a great concept but im going to rate this a zero because I come to newgrounds as a refuge from school work and i dont want to read
Patricoo responds:
okay okay, I understand. Yea, the pictures are bad I know. But understand I made them in a rush because my main focus was finishing everything else. As of now I'm going through the slides fixing every grammical error and shortening the reading as much as physically possible. There is a diffrence.
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its not the animation that sucks its the movie no humo, coolness,plot,sound,or music Anything there has to be a point to this shit
Patricoo responds:
Which is why I'm planning to make it better. I was given the suggestion of a new interface (which is a great idea) music I tried to add but had next but my flash broke down. (which I plan to fix at then of this summer)
Coolness is there. Did you even get to the end? If you endure the grammer errors there is much coolness. And the whole damn thing is a plot!
It has a point man. The point isn't very great, I know. But it does have one regaurdless.
that was stupid
To much fuckin reading. Damn man you should know people at NG don't like reading.
Patricoo responds:
I know I know man!
Ha, you should seen the full version I had. It was 76 frames of diffrent text pages. I was able to shorten it to 51. Thanks anyway, I understand completly. Next time I submit this I'll try to get rid of some text add subtle background music.
hey do us all a favor
find another hobby
Patricoo responds:
wow, how mean. And you didn't take the time to read ANY of it? You didn't take the time to notice the great interactivity? The style of my writing? THE ORIGINALITY OF THIS?! Its perfectly understandable that you wouldn't like it but could you be more detailed? Try viewing the new version in a few days, the reading is almost literally cut in half for people like you. Mabey you'll like it then.