guy at the end: ah shit here we go again
Reviews for "The Queen's secret ~Elsa Frozen~"
Mahn. your plot is great . dialogue great. but the animation is shit. look at artists like hydrafxx or derpixon. their animation is much more better. try that out. and i promise you will see better ratings, no shit.
Pretty good! The only things I can suggest:
Her breasts seem to be made of two, independent life forms that are both eager to escape her chest, only in different directions. Give them some weight and some physics and they'll look more real.
Her mouth deforms into a frightening maw when you try and zoom in during a blow job. Maybe, if the model doesn't work right and look natural there, avoid those close shots like that.
Obviously the cum doesn't work well on the dress, but I'm guessing there isn't much you can do about that.
The voice is almost totally undecipherable when the... Sort of unexplained sudden resurgence of the apple poison thing happens?
The vagina itself looks okay, as good as these models ever look I guess, but the flesh surrounding it looks like play dough stretched around the skeleton to cover a gap.
The characters all move a little unnaturally and... I'm not sure... But I think it's because they all feel like they are in a rush. I know it must be amazingly difficult to animate this kind of stuff, but if you just slowed them down a little, added some more frames and some more natural reactions and pauses, they'd feel less like they were actors rushing through their lines to get paid ASAP and more like people.
I don't know if the script writer has English as a first language, but I think the voice actor is struggling a little with how unnatural some of the lines are. Most of the words themselves are fine, just the unnatural and stilted way they come together:
"Go there." when pointing to a hiding spot, unlike the more natural feeling "Hide behind the privacy screen." or "Quick, get out of sight." or something like that.
"She should not be here." as opposed to "She's not meant to be in here." or "She shouldn't be in my room."
"What are you doing here? You must be on a journey."... I'm guessing is meant to be "How did you get here? You're miles away from home." or "What brings you here? You must have traveled for days."
Aside from those handful of little things, this is some of the best stuff on here! It's obvious time and care went into it, it's scripted, it's smooth to watch. With all the 5 second, silent, rubbery looking loops, this is awesome! Thank you!
Dezmall responds:
Thank you for such a review. it was interesting and useful to read it! And no English is not my native language :) I think for all voice actors the real test is to decipher my text. :))
Can you do a version where it is Anna instead?
VA is fine, and so is pretty much everything else. Lacks sexual fluids, though.