The beginning sounds a bit harsh. The drum part sounds generic and also really distorts the other instruments. Through a process called equalization, you can make each instrument sound much clearer. The drop at 1:10 is very minimalistic and that instrument sounds very thin and generic. After that, the piece features a short series of variations on the same progression you had earlier in the piece, but instead of building off the original riff the piece sounds like a demo reel for a series of remixes. It’s very disjointed and minimalistic throughout. The piece badly needs more melodic content. The piece ends very suddenly, and the structure simply doesn’t help keep the listener engaged. Sorry this is such a negative review. Let me offer some suggestions: going forward, I’d try to focus on writing a good melody, and then thinking about how that melody interacts with the elements of the piece that you have here (a bassline, drums, etc.). There are a lot of ways to go about writing a good melody, but usually you want it to be something that gets stuck in your head easily. Most melodies have some sort of stepwise component (like E, F#, G or C, D, E), but you also want to avoid writing arpeggios in place of melodic content. When you think you’ve written a piece that has a strong melody, please PM me. I’ll check it out. Good luck, man! ;)
1.5/10