The melodies don't really work as well in 4/4, but I liked the effort you put into trying it.
The basses are quite solid and the orchestral parts are done well too. I like your original transition to the different key.
At 2:57 it doesn't seem to impact very well comparing to the second drop of the original. But overall, the track is still quite powerful. Some of the mixing could be better; especially with transitions.
But to end on a positive note:
Damn, nice guitar.