Pros and cons...
...while I think you have a nice style, it was kind of jarbled. I know your intentions, but I don't think you pulled it off well. The main problem I have is that there is no closure; you have this girl crying, yada yada, and there's blood everywhere, but there is no definitive point. Did she witness a murder? Did she kill someone? Et cetera... whenever one tries to do a psychological piece, it's always nice to let the audience know why, adds to the intensity. Other than that, it was nicely done.
p.s. You shouldn't be a dick to Tijo221 just because he expressed his opinion. Not everyone who watches your stuff is going to be a fan; you have to take the good with the bad.