not bad...not bad at all ,welcome fo the wonderful world of adult animation!!!
Reviews for "Mooning Time Animation"
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Okay... For starters AND for the record... GOOD work...
Obvious slip? After climax... well... let's go with "completion"... There was a "sound track thing"... maybe you did it on purpose, but she was standing there alone... and it was still "playing the sex sound"...
It's not exactly the sound made for a girl waving her butt or swiveling hips... alone...
(since I don't believe in complaint without proposed solution)
Maybe go back and watch it for yourself again... double check some of those "little things" that can happen in the "export from studio-ware" step... They creep up on you.
If it's a legitimate misstep, might consider switching audio... Our minds will make "leaps" to generate story from the information, but it's easier to associate a different sound to a different activity. Folley (sound effect building) isn't horrendously difficult or complicated... so you might even be well advised to make a bit of a hobby of collecting sound effects from anywhere... or making them on your own... original touches like that REALLY HELP...
Lingering... Not a big deal, because a lot of artists try too hard to pare-down to "minimals" or avoid work... You've constructed an otherwise perfectly reasonable (if stylized) scene... AND for the record, NOT A DAMN THING WRONG with "Stylized"... That's normal and it will grow with you as an artist.
Here's the thing... While you're perfecting this scene... and you go ahead and compile it as a scene... go back and "monkey" with her facial expressions a little bit through it... She looks a bit disappointed or even bored(?) through the "hardcore" long-cut part... Let that build a bit to a smirk or smile... then let her eyes droop a bit (maybe half closed)... and finally open a grin or even let her tongue hang out as you pointedly and VISUALLY build the "tension"...
It will make the next cut to the "close up" and "climax" work out as a pay-off... see what I'm saying??
Okay... enough of the tips and "fixing" talk... This works. It visually tells the story... The ending... that last bit with them waving their hands... whatever... I get that it's part of the rest of the comic... but it's a bit out of context here... SO nothing to fix, just I think that's all they mean about "the ending is weird" talk...
You've got good QUALITY and CLEAN audio... That's imperative, and done. It's a mark of someone with the skills to move upward... taking audio as seriously as it should be.
The motions are fluid and reasonably intelligent. It's not all dedicated to squash and stretch mechanics to "trick" anything. You use classic methods to show emphasis where you intend... It works and it's good.
Now, don't forget to breathe and relax. Then keep on keeping on. Artists create... get feedback... process a minute... and create again. I hope this helps. ;o)
meatloafy responds:
I love these kind of comments and suggestions, really helps a lot! Thanks for spending your time trying to help me.. i appreciate it a lot. ^^, awesome
We all start somewhere, it has potential and can't wait to see what you'll have next.
Scenes dragged on a bit long,anatomy was weird at times,and the sound effects used could have been better
but still,i enjoyed it